Submitted by jpaolicelli on Mon, 01/25/2010 - 1:03pm

                          Trapped Under Ice

The winter landscape changed with a crack. Jake watched the ice-skating man fall through the frozen pond. A screaming woman reached into the icy water, but the current dragged the man away.

Air bubbles roiled, hiding the face staring up through the ice. His mouth gasped and fingers clawed desperately, but the ice was too thick.

“Jake, please don’t die,” the woman cried.

Jake stared into the glassy eyes trapped under ice. As the last bubble left the body, a numbing chill ran through him, and the world fell silent.

Jake sighed, “I’m sorry,” as he walked alone into forever.

John,

I really liked the first and last lines. About the only thing I can pick on is that at the begining I got the impression that Jake was watching from farther away and then he is staring into the body's eyes.

Dave K